Rin-Rin wrote:

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Yeah, today I was on time. Well, if there haven’t been any hiccups with the scheduling. I actually wrote this post on Wednesday and told my blog to post it now. I hope it works.

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I decided to post an excerpt from a WIP that is related to my current main WIP. My main WIP is Scrambled: Collecting Strings -Melker Frost. This excerpt is fromΒ Scrambled: Collecting Strings -Kiriya Hargrave. The novellas/novelettes take place during the same point in time, but the first POV is different.

He smelled like the air after a thunderstorm, like freshly baked bread, like food when you’re starved, like a barbecue with friends. He smelled like home. I jammed my shaking hands into my pockets, I needed a cigarette.

I sent him a glare, stalked over to the closest free room and slammed the door behind me. I leaned against the door, pulling the phone out of my pocket IΒ speed-dialed my mom. My hands were still shaking, I couldn’t will them to stop.

“Yes?” my mother asked from the other side of the line, she knew it was me.

“Mom, I can’t stay here, please don’t make me stay here, I-” I couldn’t tell her why. “I need more tobacco.”

30 Comments

  1. Ed Hoornaert

    He really gets under her skin!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Indeed he does. πŸ™‚ (They are both guys, though. I forgot to mention that.)

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  2. Veronica Scott

    Especially enjoyed the description at the start of the snippet! Really well done and I could visualize the character’s shakiness over needing tobacco AND the other guy.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      πŸ™‚ Thank you very much!

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  3. Christina Ochs

    Those are some really nice smells! And all in one person too. No wonder tobacco is needed!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Yep, especially the special tobacco that his mother makes. ^_~

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  4. Alexis Duran

    Whoah, he’s got it bad (in a good way, me thinks). But will Mom have sympathy for his tobacco addiction?

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Yep, really bad XD (He won’t think so, at least not at first) She has sympathy for it, since she’s partly to blame (she thinks). They are both werewolves. πŸ˜›

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  5. Kim Magennis

    Your first paragraph is awesome! Nicely done. I also like the tension you have created. Trouble!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      πŸ™‚ thank you! <3

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  6. Stephanie Ingram

    Lots of tension for sure. Beautiful description. He must be as addictive as those cigarettes. πŸ˜‰ Great snippet!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Thank you! πŸ™‚ Yeah, he’ll try to keep away at first but it won’t work. XD;

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  7. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Great snippet. I have the first glimpse of your character and how this guy gets under her skin and how that just irritates her. Love how you betrayed her need for a cigarette too.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Thank you! ^_^

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  8. Suzie Quint

    It’s a b*tch when you can’t trust yourself. Nice job conveying wanting something you know you shouldn’t.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Yeah, it is. *looks at chocolate bar* …thank you. πŸ™‚

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  9. Karen de Lange

    Wonderful snippet – your descriptions of your main character’s reactions are so relatable.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      πŸ™‚ Thank you!

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  10. ARHuelsenbeck

    Wow, lots of scents in that first paragraph, and I think (from reading the comments) I understand why scents are very important to your character…I’m looking forward to reading future snippets.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Yep πŸ™‚ Thank you! The next snippet will be from the other character’s POV.

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  11. S. M. Pace

    Oh! I love the emotion that comes off her, and the sensory detail really brings this alive for me. I especially love that last line.

    Scheduled posting has saved my behind on many occasions πŸ™‚ Although there have been other times when I schedule a half done post promising myself I’d get to it later, and never did. *redface*

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Thank you! πŸ™‚

      Haha, yeah, that’s why I haven’t used it before. I’m pretty sure I will completely forget about it. XD

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  12. Caitlin Stern

    You know someone has it bad when another person smells like home to them.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Yeah. XD

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  13. Elaine Cantrell

    Oh, he’s got it bad, or maybe a previous history?

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Well, mostly it’s that he’s got it bad. But there is a slight bit of previous history there as well. But not with the new person he just met. XD

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  14. Jessica E. Subject

    Very intriguing! I’m curious as to their past.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      πŸ™‚ Thank you! …they are strangers to each other actually. πŸ˜›

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  15. Teresa Cypher

    Good job of showing his stressed out state. πŸ™‚ I shove my hands in my pockets too when I get nervous. πŸ™‚

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Thank you! πŸ™‚ …I fiddle with things, but Kiriya is a hands in pockets kind of person. XD;

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