Rin-Rin wrote:

WeWriWa #4

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Remember the last snippet? When Melker found his landlord under the bed? Well, now we’ve skipped forward for a bit to chapter 3 in where they have all sat down for a bit of an odd lunch.

Even with the obsessive-compulsive zoning of his food; Rice in a circle in the middle of the plate, the stew on top of it and the salad surrounding it, he came across as a normal person to me now. Maybe he had dropped something under the bed and he had to get it out and, um, then he had fallen asleep under there?

“I see.” I replied. Watching him exchange his plate with his daughter’s empty one. Completely focused on the plate Lily raised her spoon. Our landlord’s heavily pierced and menacing looking face softened when he looked at her.

“Be careful, it’s hot,” he told her. I could now see the volcano island on her plate. 

 

Scrambled is my current WIP, it’s a bunch of first person novellas telling of the same events but from different views. It will contain Shounen-ai / LGBTQ / Urban fantasy / Slice of life / Drama elements and I’ll have the first novella published in 2018.

43 Comments

  1. Jessica E. Subject

    Interesting. Usually parents are the one telling children not to play with their food.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      She’s a picky eater, who doesn’t eat much, so he’s trying to make it fun for her. XD

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  2. Veronica Scott

    That was a fun excerpt, I liked it!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      🙂 Thank you!

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  3. Elyzabeth M. VaLey

    Hum, looks like he cares for his daughter. NIce snippet !

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      He does, thank you! 🙂

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  4. Daryl Devore

    I like the volcano. Tweeted.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Thank you! 🙂

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  5. Jess Schira

    I agree with Veronica, it’s a fun, well written snippet. Nice job!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      🙂 Thank you very much!

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  6. Charmaine Gordon

    Lots of fun in this snippet. No holds barred. Good job, Rin-Rin

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Thank you Charmaine! 🙂

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  7. Alexis Duran

    So he never explained what he was doing under Melker’s bed? This is a strange lot he’s fallen in with. Strange, but interesting.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Ah, Mr. Kross hid under his own bed in his own room. But yeah, their landlord is odd and Melker is trying to ignore it. He didn’t dare ask what Mr. Kross was doing there. XD;

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  8. Christina Ochs

    Aw, he made her a volcano-plate! Interesting snippet!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Jupp! 🙂 Thank you!

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  9. Cara Bristol

    The landlord is an interesting character. Nice details.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      🙂 Thank you!

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  10. Aurora Springer

    He seems a good father

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      He’s trying to be. 🙂

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  11. Ed Hoornaert

    I love the surreal element to all this. I have no idea what’s going on, of course, but I’m not worried about that; getting there is half the fun.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Yeah! Thank you! 🙂

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  12. Elaine Cantrell

    I like the way you showed the father’s concern for his daughter.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      🙂 thank you!

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  13. Amy Braun

    This is fun, but I can’t get last week’s snippet out of my head!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      I’m not sure if that’s a good thing or not. XD

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  14. Teresa Cypher

    Interesting. I didn’t know where it was going–but really enjoyed this line: “Even with the obsessive-compulsive zoning of his food; Rice in a circle in the middle of the plate, the stew on top of it and the salad surrounding it…”

    Wonderful concept for the story–the varying POVs telling the same tale. 🙂

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Yeah, I’m jumping around a bit showing scenes that I really enjoyed writing XD; Thank you! 🙂

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  15. Jenna Jaxon

    Fun way to be creative with your food. The last line made it all clear to me. Excellent!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      🙂 Thanks!

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  16. Caitlin Stern

    Who doesn’t need a volcano plate? Love how he’s trying to make excuses, and even he can’t make them sound plausible!

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Yeah, he doesn’t dare actually asking what he was doing under there…and the thing is, if he had actually dared then Mr. Kross would’ve been forced to reply with the truth. XD

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  17. Diane Burton

    Nice showing his devotion to his daughter. Fun snippet.

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  18. Diane Burton

    Nice showing his devotion to his daughter. Fun snippet. Liked the volcano plate.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      🙂 Thank you!

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  19. Karen Michelle Nutt

    I like how you described the hot food. Clever.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Thanks! 🙂

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  20. Rachel de Vine

    I’m new to this book, but your snippet is sweet in the way that the father makes the plate more attractive for the child to eat. Any parent will understand! Good snippet.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      🙂 Thank you!

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  21. Joyce Scarbrough

    Wow, what an intriguing character! Can’t wait to find out more about him.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      Which one? XD Thank you!

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  22. Elizabeth Alsobrooks

    Fun snippet! Preparing food in such a way lets the reader know how much he cares about his daughter, as does his softening expression.

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    1. Rin-Rin (Post author)

      🙂 Thank you!

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